First Draft
I have recently finished my first draft. I have lined u the words and done some slight transitions and styling. I would love to try and push it more and make it more immersive and powerful. I feel that may come more in the transitions. Let me know if you have any feedback. Always open for it!
I like how you contrasted the two voices with the blue/red backgrounds. If you wanted to push this aspect further, you could create voice/character-specific type systems. Maybe when you add more transitions, that could differentiate them as well. This is super minor but I wish there were just a tiny bit more room between the words "peter" and "screws".
ReplyDeleteI really like this so far!!
This is a great start! I really like the audio choice first of all, and like Lelia was saying, the use of individual colors for both voices was a smart idea. I think it could be interesting in your transitions to make them a bit "bouncier" if that makes sense, so maybe a bit of a slight zoom in and zoom out right before the text pops up to give it some extra animation. Otherwise great job!
ReplyDeleteI like the way you have explored different text weights and scale to emphasize certain words or phrases. It might also be interesting to explore different fonts between the two main voices since they are somewhat contrasting in the audio. I also like how you scrolled down for more of the dialogue especially during those pauses between dialogue.
ReplyDeleteNice! I enjoy that you contrasted the different voices with the different colors, transitioning the shapes to keep the eye engaged. I think it would be interesting to include some kind of effect or something at the end when iron man opened his suit so that your audience isn't just staring at words that don't entirely convey what's happening at that point.
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